I want to get this one published, so I really need some honest critiques... and I think you guys are the mean bastards to give 'em to me! 
I do hope you enjoy it, though. But if you have even the slightest of problems with any part, or if you pick up a spelling error or something, please, let me know.
My main concerns are that it's boring in the middle and muddled at the end.
I do hope you enjoy it, though. But if you have even the slightest of problems with any part, or if you pick up a spelling error or something, please, let me know.
My main concerns are that it's boring in the middle and muddled at the end.
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